hi Becky! wow, i really love this poem! you're right, it has a peculiar beat to it, but it's catchy... it almost draws me through the poem, so i re-read it a couple times to pay attention to the words and ideas and rhythm each time. It's fun, because it makes me wonder, what would it be like if all these simple words we knew meant something else? Our whole world would be turned upside down! Or at least our language.

As for suggestions, I only have one: Coming to the last line, I feel like pausing in between the is's, to give it a concluding feel, one last musing statement, so to speak. Or maybe one last puzzled rhetorical question. What is... "is"?, or maybe What IS "is"? though the feel of the first is closer to what i'm suggesting

Great Job!
~Sarah

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"I've knocked my inner dork askew...
and now I'm using tape to fix it!"

wow! this is definitely different, but i find myself strangely attracted to it. It's very catchy

It's very amusing to read over and over. I like it!

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TD^_^
NINJA!!!!

Everything has exceptions, even exceptions

I'm very glad you like it.

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"What we learned as children, that one plus one equals two, we know to be false. One plus one equals one. We even have a word for when you plus another equals one. That word is Love." - Life

Thanks, ze-smai!

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"What we learned as children, that one plus one equals two, we know to be false. One plus one equals one. We even have a word for when you plus another equals one. That word is Love." - Life

Thank you, Sarah! Love ya, girl!

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"What we learned as children, that one plus one equals two, we know to be false. One plus one equals one. We even have a word for when you plus another equals one. That word is Love." - Life

I really like this, interesting concept

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~ ßεc ~

♥ I can stop and catch my breath and look no further for happiness. And I will not turn again cos my heart has found its home.♥

^_^ Thank you.

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"What we learned as children, that one plus one equals two, we know to be false. One plus one equals one. We even have a word for when you plus another equals one. That word is Love." - Life